And They Say You Can't Get Full Marks For Essays...

Hey.

How many of you ever had a full mark for an essay (creative writing, etc.)? I HAVE!

And I'm so proud of myself that I am deciding to write the whole essay on my blog.

What a humble guy I am... :)

Basically, this essay is a persuasive essay, where I have to persuade the reader to side with my opinions on the topic.

I have written everything below...

P.S: Rabbitproof Fence is a movie, relating to this essay.
Topic - "Justice is achieved for those with power"

[Authorial choices]

Audience - readers who want to know if true justice is really served in our world, especially those who are about to reach an age where obeying the law is very important (young adults).

Form - It is a persuasive essay, meant to persuade the reader that there IS no ultimate justice in the world except the form of justice controlled by people who have power.

Context - This essay would be good as a newspaper article. I have used Rabbitproof Fence as one of my references and other examples to further prove my points.

Purpose - To put out my point of view on how justice is being served in our times. To also let readers know there are two sides to everything.

Language - I have used many rhetorical questions in this essay because I want the reader to think as they read this essay. As they think, they will start to agree with my views. I have also used inclusive language to make them feel included, slowly having no choice but to agree with this essay.

[Essay]

For centuries, the world has been split into different social classes. What sets these classes apart? The obvious answer would be wealth, status and power. However, there is another thing that these classes do not have in common; how they are judged under the law. The law is merely a tool to find justice. Although the law is universal, it does not always bring justice to everyone.

Before we go on any further, one has to ask, what is true justice? There is actually no answer to that, because there is no true justice in this unfair world. People like us create a sense of justice so that everyone will feel that they are treated fairly and morally aiming for since the beginning of centuries. What we don't know is that justice IS controlled, controlled by people with power. Authorities are allowed to implement 'justice' when needed. Who gives them the right to judge us under the law? Another example is the judge. A judge is someone who has the authority to sentence one to whatever punishment he deserves. A judge is merely a person too, just like all of us. And he can decide a person's fate without even knowing his life story or background. How is this ultimate justice?

Even as I write all this, some may disagree with my views on justice. This is because we all have different views on justice. As the saying goes: Justice is in the eye of the beholder. This means that different people have different opinions on what true justice is. Take Rabbitproof Fence for example. Mr Neville is of a higher status than the Aborigines in the country at that time. His view on justice states that all half-caste children should be taken away from their families and raised in a white family, so that the children will lead better lives than the ones they had with their original family. We have all been told to listen to both sides of the story before judging anything. But in the case of Rabbitproof Fence, did anyone listen to what the Aborigines think? No, and the half-caste children were taken away as Mr Neville ordered it, just like that. Why? Because he has power and he believes that justice would be achieved by all if the children were taken away, but instead not all (especially the Aborigines) feel that justice has been achieved. With this, everyone has different attitudes towards right and wrong. Each person develops their own idea of justice to meet their own individual needs. If true justice is meant to be universal, why is it that different people have different views on justice? There is obviously no ultimate justice in this world, only justice that some can control.

With power comes money and status. The people who have power control the justice system. Imagine a rich guilty man and a poor innocent man. The rich guilty man can hire the best lawyer to defend but the innocent cannot. Is justice being served? No. The best lawyers are determined by how much money a person can afford. Also, money can be used as a 'get out of jail free' card. Whoever thought of that idea must have thought that justice is still being achieved if the criminal can afford to pay his way out of jail. If this happens, how can the victim feel that justice is served if the criminal is allowed to be free? Justice was meant for the innocent to feel safe and the perpetrators to suffer the consequences for their actions. But not in this unfair world. Money is used to control justice, so how is it that justice is consistent towards everyone? Perhaps the only person who stood out against this corrupt justice system is Mahatma Gandhi. He fought for the Indians for their freedom from the British by proclaiming the power of love, peace and freedom. His courage and conviction allowed him to change history. He did not use money or status to control justice, but his determination to correct an unfair world helped to change justice as it is today.

Justice is not true and it never was. Instead, people with power control justice to make it seem that justice has been achieved. There are many forms of justice in the world. But ultimately, who decides what forms of justice should been implemented. By now, the answer should be clear. Gandhi fought his way to achieve justice not by how much money he has or how much power he has in his hands, but by his heart and soul. One should not use status, power or military to reform the world but by his own might and that force of spirit to make this a better place for all.

[Teacher's comments]

Excellent persuasive language, addressing complexities. Good use of specific examples. Excellent expression and vocabulary with only few minor errors. Great 'voice'. Well done! =)
30/30!!!!


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